Clearly, He’s Done This Before

Friday Fictioneer!

Every week, we get a chance to write a 100-word story about the photo prompt shared by Rochelle. This week, the photo is provided by Roger Bultot. Check more takes on the prompt why clicking here.

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She smiled at me. I smiled back. She seemed shy, totally my type. She was alone too. There were so many roaming around but my eyes were fixated on her.

I walked towards her. We came face to face behind a pillar. She said she’s called Sharon. I told her she has something on her nose. I offered my handkerchief which she took. I forced my hand on her nose.

It didn’t take long for the chloroform to do the job.

She fell in my arms. I shouted, “Help! My wife fainted. Can someone help take her to my car?”


(100 words)

42 thoughts on “Clearly, He’s Done This Before

  1. Clever kidnapping. I hate to do this, but I once looked up the effects of ether and chloroform for a story I was writing where I needed to knock out someone quick but without violence. As it turns out, both of them will render a person unconscious after several minutes of exposure, not several seconds. All of those TV shows and movies were wrong.

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    1. Thanks James for pointing that out. I won’t change it now but this is one thing I should know for future stories and also, you know, if I plan to kidnap someone😅😏

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      1. Almost no one would have noticed it since it’s such a common trope, but I like to do my research.

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  2. I will never again tell a stranger I have something on my nose. Wait I don’t think I ever have before, either.

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    1. But what if the stranger tells you you have something on your nose.

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      1. Ah! I totally read that wrong. Thanks.

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  3. Clever! Me thinks you have a devious mind!! Well done!

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    1. Hehe. I guess I’ll write a lighter story next time😅 Thanks for stopping by.

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  4. The title says it all, which does make me wonder about the author too!! Nice story 🙂

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    1. Hehe, nope. I think there are better ways to get a wife, like the old fashion ‘fall in love and marry’ way. I find that easier😅 Thanks for Reading and commenting. 😊

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  5. Oh, that is sneaky on a whole other level. First we have to worry about someone putting something in our drinks, now we have to worry about a dot on our nose.. (and who cares, James?) It’s a story…
    Love it Shivam.

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  6. I suppose it’s quicker than Tinder! Nice one Shivam.

    Click to read my FriFic tale

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    1. Haha! It sure is! Thanks for reading! 😊

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  7. Horrifyingly convincing.

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  8. Dear Shivam,

    Minutes? Seconds? It made for a great story with the title adding another 100 words. Bravo!

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle! I too was proud that I got the title right this time😅

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  9. I don’t care if it’s not entirely accurate that someone can pass out within seconds – it’s called ‘artistic licence’, and I thoroughly enjoyed your chilling little story!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Glad you liked it Susan! I’ll be more careful with use of such technical things. Although, thanks for giving me this term, Artistic Licence. I’ll use it next time I do something like this😅

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  10. That’s an ingenious and plausible story, with a great title. You give it good pace by using short, to-the-point sentences. Well done!

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    1. Thanks! I was told before that I use too long sentences. I made sure I express what I want to say in a concise manner. Glad it worked! 😅

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  11. A very clever tale. Aw, poor Sharon. Hope she gets away.

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    1. I hope Sharon would be the one who got away in the end. The one who kills him. Thanks for reading Lisa😊

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  12. Oh! Sneaky, smart, scary man.

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    1. Indeed he is! Thanks for reading and you kind comment😊

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  13. Maybe this was a newfangled version of chloroform that knocks people out, a new recipe your kidnapper was field testing. He made one slip up: the lack of wedding rings, if anyone noticed in the turmoil.

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    1. That’s a great observation. I should’ve put a line about him slipping a wedding ring on her finger. Thanks for that!

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  14. I loved this story, just slightly worried about so many handy hints on kidnap and murder this week!

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    1. Hehe. I think many of us got that idea by looking at the crowd. Many movies have depicted such kidnappings and murders in such crowded places to induce thrill.

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      1. Yes, they seem to lend themselves to those tense scenes.

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  15. Never take a handkerchief from a stranger! Well written!

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    1. That’s true! It’s difficult to trust strangers nowadays with all these crimes happening all around us. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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  16. Ouch… and after he has her at his mercy, will she grow fond of him? does it matter?…

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    1. That’s what they call Stockholm syndrome right? If he’s done this before, and many times, maybe she won’t be alive for much long to grow fond of him🙁

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      1. The Stockholm syndrome did not really happen either… based on a bank-robbery with hostages. I do not believe it works that way.

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      2. Ah! I thought I read that definition somewhere.

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      3. The definition is there… but I meant that it didn’t really happen like that in the Stockholm case…

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      4. Okay😅. I get it now. Thanks for that info.

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  17. Oh, cleverly done. I read your story twice to get the idea that the woman was NOT his wife. He’s a scary guy.

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    1. Indeed he is! Thanks for reading Alicia! 😊

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