Blame

Friday Fictioneer!

Every week Rochelle provides us with a picture on which we have to write a complete meaningful piece in just 100 words. This week’s photo prompt is provided by Sandra Crook. To read more stories for this prompt, click here.

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My daughter loved that abominable stack. She always used to climb it and we used to rush towards her to make sure she didn’t fall.

But one fateful day, she fell. And I wasn’t there to catch her.

Whenever I close my eyes, I see it all happening again. Me putting headphones on, her running outside, me getting sleepy, her falling, me sleeping while she cries in pain for my help.

Everyone has only one thing to say – “it wasn’t your fault”. But one voice says otherwise – my own.

They say time heals all wounds. But what about guilt?


(99 words)

I really liked the film Manchester By the Sea. That’s why this week I thought I can write on a similar theme. It’s very hard for a parent to find a will to live if they blame themselves for the death of a child. The pain goes away, but the guilt stays.

35 thoughts on “Blame

  1. Such a sad, poignant story. Beautifully done.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. Thanks for your kind words Susan.

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  2. Sad story and the worst fear of every parent.

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    1. Indeed. Thanks for reading Iain.

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  3. Very scary one!! Short and strong..

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    1. I was sceptical about its impact at first. Your comment removed my doubts. Glad you liked it. 😊

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  4. Every parent’s worst nightmare. There is no recovery from it.

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    1. Indeed. People who don’t go through such pain will never understand what such parents feel.

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  5. Accidents can happen in a heartbeat. It must be terrible for the parent to feel their negligence contributed to the death of their child.

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    1. Yes. But how to make them understand that it wasn’t there fault? Thanks for dropping by.

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  6. As a father, I understand perfectly. There’s a similar storyline which is a part of ‘Flashbacks of a Fool.’ I was reminded of that while reading your story.

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    1. Oh, haven’t seen that one yet. Will give it a go.

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  7. This is a dilemma for any parent who loses a child to a preventable accident–at least, preventable in the grieving parent’s eyes. The guilt is overwhelming, and words aren’t usually helpful. You’ve done a good job of drawing that picture here.

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    1. You couldn’t be more right. Thanks for reading and you kind comment.

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  8. Really powerful last line!!

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    1. Glad you liked it! 😊 I was stuck on that one for long.😅

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      1. Ah..that can be dangerous! 😉

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  9. Heart rending. The worst fear of a parent.

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    1. I agree! No matter how many times someone console you, its difficult to get rid of such feeling.

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  10. Dear Shivam,

    You’ve written every parent’s nightmare. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  11. I can’t imagine how one manages to go on beneath that burden of guilt.

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    1. Same here. It is a burden even they don’t know how to bear.

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  12. This is so sad, I share what everyone else said, a nightmare. And perfectly told.

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  13. Such a tragic story, Shivam. No way a parent would not feel guilty… heartbreaking.

    Suggestion: change your doesn’t fall to didn’t fall as the rest of the story is in the past…

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    1. Thanks Dale. I made the changes.😊

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  14. I think guilt never goes away… especially when a child is concerned…

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    1. Sad but true. Thanks for stopping by😊

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  15. You can feel his pain and regret. Nice progression through the moments–and mistakes–of that fateful day, set on automatic replay in his mind. You mourn the kid but also mourn for the parent’s lost innocence.

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    1. You’ve put it perfectly. Thanks for reading😊

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  16. Sad, poignant & beautifully written Shivam.

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